First trainer

Name alexander thatcher
Nickname : alex
Age: 15
Gender: Male
Rank: Trainer
birthplace: Johto olivine city
battle style: he thinks of a strategy and plans his moves carefullt before he attacks
looks: - white hair
- grey eyes
- serious face
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personality : alexander is a hardworking and kind person. he would helps everyone where he can he trains his pokemon hard but he still acts nice. ren isn't quite sporty ,you can call him a computer nerd, he had developed many tactics with his computer to defeat his enemy's.

History: alexander was born in Johto in olivine city ,he was amazed how strong the gymleader was when he watched her battle for the first time .when he was at the age of 9 he got is first pokemon ,it was a beldum .he was so happy because he wanted to be a steel type trainer .after that he got a brother called jake. the dream of ren is to become the gym leader of olivine city and to battle with his steel pokemon .

gym badges : none
money: 6,500
items: 5 Pokeballs, 1 Dusk Stone

pokemon:beldum
nickname: has no nickname
gender: has no gender
level: 10
ability: clear body
moves: take down
personality: friendly
Exp: 3

Pokémon: Murkrow
Nickname: -
Gender: Male
Level: 15
Ability: Isomnia
Moves: Shadow Ball (TM), Peck, Astonish, Pursuit, Haze, Wing Attack
Personality: Stubborn

goal: become the gym leader of olivine city
likes: fierce gym battles
hates: people who are mean to pokemon
team alex dreams of : steelix,metagross, bisharp, escavalier, klinklang,aggron
hope it is good enough

Just a few minor edits need to be done. First is to please add punctuation to your personality and history to make it paragraphs instead of a run-on sentence. Second is to edit Beldum's moves, beldum can only know Take Down (as it is all that Beldum can learn).

I'll approve it, but if you plan on making another character it'll be critiqued harder than this one. Have fun role playing at PW!