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PostSubject: A new character   A new character H6Q0F8zSat Jan 26, 2013 7:03 pm

Name: Sam Smith
Nickname: Sammy
Age: 14
Gender: Male
Rank: Pokemon SS Field Agent
Birthplace: Hoenn Dewford city
Battle Style: Physical
Looks:        
http://media.comicvine.com/uploads/10/101481/2484263-anime-boy--large-msg-119479397947.jpg

Personality:Sam is a kind hearted person who always helps those he trusts and are in need.
He may look weak but his role in the pokemon SS is largely trusted as he is one of the top field agents.
The problem is he hates it when criminals get away untouched.
He like to chat quite often and if he isn't chatting he's listening to his music.

History: Sam was born in dewford city and raised by his father.
At the age of 11 he was sent to a training facility in unova and was sent a training assignment to infltrait team plasma's base which he succeeded in doing with flying colors.
He then decided to take his final test become a companion of a villian and
His luck was so great that he brought the villain to the ss who signed him up.

Pokemon's History

Zoroark:
Sam Found his Zoroark when it was a young zorua at level 15.
Zorua was given to Sam on his tenth birthday on the day he set off to travel.
He evolved when they arrived in Littleroot town.
Zoroark is such a high level due to the training at Pokemon SS

Gyrados
Gyrados was found in a lake at level 40 catching Gyrados was one of Sam's hardest captures'
Sam decided to take him  to a move tutor to learn draco meteor.
Gyrados perfected the move after a week of learning.
Gyrados is so powerful due to hight traing in the SS.

Bisharp
Bisharp was alongside with lucario one of the pokemon Sam was given to do stealth field missions.
Bisharp was given to Sam at level 50.
Bisharp always checks twice which saved Sam's life due to a laser tripwire which could have summoned a dozen of plasma grunts.
Bisharp is a high level due to being given to Sam trained and ready to help.

Lucario
Lucario  was alongside with Bisharp one of the pokemon Sam was given to do stealth field missions.
Lucario like Bisharp was given to Sam at level 50 Lucario though created a mental connection with gregor in minutes.
Lucario is probaly the pokemon which helped most at getting Sam through training .
Sam was given Lucario trained already.

Infernape
Infernape was a poor hungry pokemon which Sam found during the final days of his Pokemon SS.
Infernape was found at level  55.
Infernape when found was surrounded by burning oil which could explode any second.
Infernape is such a high level already due to being trained but then abandoned.


Badges:
Items: 5 Poke Balls
Money: $6,200

Pokémon
Pokémon: Zoroark
Nickname:None
Gender:Male
Level: 56
Moves: Shadow ball
Start U-Turn
Start Scratch
Start Leer
Start Pursuit
Start Hone Claws
13 Fury Swipes
17 Faint attack
21 Scary Face
25 Taunt
29 Foul Play
30 Night Slash
34 Torment
39 Agility
44 Embargo
49 Punishment
54 Nasty Plot
Type: Dark
Ability: Illusion
Personality: Zoroark is very protective of sam but is also very playful
Exp: 0

Pokémon: Gyrados
Nickname: None
Gender: Male
Level: 58
Moves: Draco Meteor
Start - Thrash
20 - Bite
23 - Dragon Rage
26 - Leer
29 - Twister
32 - Ice Fang
35 - Aqua Tail
38 - Rain Dance
41 - Hydro Pump
44 - Dragon Dance
47 - Hyper Beam
Type: Flying and water
Ability: Intimidate
Personality: Proud and refuses to back down
Exp: 0

Pokémon: Bisharp
Nickname: None
Gender: Male
Level: 54
Moves: Steel Claw
Start - Metal Burst
Start - Scratch
Start - Leer
Start - Fury Cutter
Start - Torment
6 - Leer
9 - Fury Cutter
17 - Faint Attack
22 - Scary Face
25 - Metal Claw
30 - Slash
33 - Assurance
38 - Metal Sound
41 - Embargo
46 - Iron Defense
49 - Night Slash
Type: Steel and Dark
Ability: Inner focus
Personality: Bisharp is very sneaky and cautious and is usually the pokemon relied on for stealth attacks.
Exp: 0

Pokémon: Lucario
Nickname: None
Gender: Male
Level: 53
Moves:
Ice punch
Start - Dark Pulse
Start - Foresight
Start - Quick Attack
Start - Detect
Start - Metal Claw
6 - Counter
11 - Feint
15 - Force Palm
19 - Me First
24 - Metal Sound
29 - Bone Rush
33 - Quick Guard
37 - Swords Dance
42 - Heal Pulse
51 - Aura Sphere
Type: Fighting and Steel
Ability: Inner Focus
Personality: Lucario will always look ahead ensuring the path is safe for usage.
Exp: 0

Pokémon: Infernape
Nickname: None
Gender: Male
Level: 60
Moves: Flare blitz
Start - Scratch
Start - Leer
Start - Ember
Start - Taunt
14 - Mach Punch
16 - Fury Swipes
19 - Flame Wheel
26 - Feint
29 - Punishment
36 - Close Combat
42 - Fire Spin
52 - Acrobatics
58 - Calm Mind
Type: Fight Fire
Ability: Iron Fist
Personality: Infernape is  over Confident and the only person to sort him out is lucario.
Exp: 0

Pokémon: Talonflame
Nickname: None
Gender: Male
Level: 56
Moves:
Start - Brave Bird
Start - Flare Blitz
Start - Tackle
Start - Growl
6 - Quick Attack
10 - Peck
13 - Agility
16 - Flail
17 - Ember
25 - Roost
27 - Razor Wind
31 - Natural Gift
39 - Flame Charge
44 - Acrobatics
49 - Me First
55 - Tailwind
Type: Fire/Flying
Ability: Gale Wings
Personality: Proud, but loyal.
Exp: 0

Pokémon: Magmar
Gender: Male
Level: 29
Moves:
Smog
Smokescreen
Ember
Leer
Feint Attack
Fire Spin
Flame Burst
Clear Smog
Confuse Ray
Fire Punch
Ability: Flame Body
Personality: Very kind, but has a tendency to spaz and accidentally burn things.
Experience: 0


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PostSubject: Re: A new character   A new character H6Q0F8zSat Jan 26, 2013 9:10 pm

I'm sorry but already having badges is not allowed, and you must put all the moves he nows not + known moves at the right level. Also having 5 high level pokemon with the age of 13? But even so you must put in history how you gained them.
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PostSubject: Re: A new character   A new character H6Q0F8zSun Jan 27, 2013 12:02 pm

edited
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PostSubject: Re: A new character   A new character H6Q0F8zSun Jan 27, 2013 12:22 pm

Recommended Fixes:
1] Space after "Looks" so picture is on separate line aligned to the left
2] Space after "Personality" and "History" so the paragraphs are on separate lines and better to read
3] Under Zoroark, add "[b]" so "EXP" will be bold
4] Under Gyarados, fix name to "Gyrados"
5] Under Bisharp, add colon after "Type" and a space with spacebar
6] Under Lucario, add colon after "Type" and a space with spacebar
7] Remove red text at bottom, as it was only a reminder
8] Merge all of your pokemons' histories into the character history so that it will be longer and show where you got every pokemon at, and why they are high levels
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PostSubject: Re: A new character   A new character H6Q0F8zSun Jan 27, 2013 12:49 pm

fixed
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PostSubject: Re: A new character   A new character H6Q0F8zSun Jan 27, 2013 12:51 pm

Alright, you're getting better at improving the app, but you need to check at the types for your pokemon. There are still colons missing and spaces inbetween words in these spots. Also, like Mystogan said, you need to remove that the character currently has badges.
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PostSubject: Re: A new character   A new character H6Q0F8zSun Jan 27, 2013 2:52 pm

I think this is okay now. I'd say it's approved, but if Fang or Lucretia see otherwise, please listen to them.
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PostSubject: Re: A new character   A new character H6Q0F8zSun Jan 27, 2013 5:45 pm

I'm just going to say it's approved, so only if lucretia disproves should this be moved out
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