Welcome to Lavaridge City!

"huh? what time is it? 12:00 PM! I over slept!"
"Ledi! Ledi! LEDI!!!" said Ledi's mother. Today is your first day of your pokemon adventure!" Ledi then goes downstairs to eat his mother's homemade pancakes. "Surskit! Swadloon! Jolitk!" said Ledi's mother as the trio marched down, each carrying an egg on their backs. "Breakfast is ready!"

10 mins. later
Ledi's says "I wonder where Lori went". At what Ledi said, Ledi's mother hopped up like a Hoppip got a brain freeze."Lori said that she was going to surf all the way to Littleroot city to get a Mudkip." At this, Surskit attempts to take the TM Scald and teach it.

Another 10 mins, out side the house
"It's time for me to teach Scald, and embark on a new journey!" said Ledi, ready to finally start.

Surskit is starting to learn Scald! Surskit's eyes close and it begins to glow just slightly. After a few seconds, the glow fades and Surskit opens its eyes.
Congratulations! Surskit has learned Scald!
Just as the Pokemon cheers in joy, a bush nearby begins to shake. Out from the bush, comes a bunny-like Pokemon with whitish-yellow fluffy fur around its torso and ear tips!
Buneary
Level 14
Female

Woah! a Buneary! Surskit! Use Scald!

The Buneary hopped up to dodge the attack, then landed to the side of the Surskit and unleashed a Pound attack. It attacked quickly in hopes of getting some quick damage, then it would jump away, out of range of any close-range attacks.

Wait for it, Wait surskit,

Buneary rampaged at the Surskit, then Surskit unleashed Bubble

(Um, Da Bomb-omb? Could you RP differently? The way you RP is too short and it must seem like a 'story'. Use quotation marks for speaking, tell who's speaking, and also say who's doing what.)

(Thanks for the advice. I will re-write it right under this.)

The Buneary charged with a vicious Pound. When Buneary came at Surskit, Ledi shouted "Surskit! Use Bubble! Surskit didn't follow directions, and when Buneary charged, Surskit used a really close range Scald certain to hit. If Buneary were to dodge, Pound would miss, giving Ledi a chance to retreat, send Swadloon, and GrassWhistle Buneary to sleep.

(Erm, could you emphasize what close-range attack Surskit used? I just need to know so that I can properly think of what the Buneary would do.)

Edited.

Where it says if buneary were to charge, pound would miss, I ment if Buneary were to miss

(Oh, you also accidentally 'godmodded' a bit by saying that Buneary charged with a vicious Pound. I didn't write that Buneary had charged again in my last post, so you can't write that.)

I had no Idea what you wrote, and I thought that it was coming at Surskit, not attacked already

The Buneary decided to dodge the Scald attack, jumping back to avoid any more contact with the Surskit's attacks. Frowning, it began to think quick. It was having difficulty figuring out a tactic to avoid getting itself hurt.

Now! Go poke ball!

The Buneary, having always been a wild Pokemon, did not recognize the object thrown at it, and was captured inside. The ball shook once, twice, thrice, and then finally glowed, showing that it was a successful capture.
Congratulations! You've caught a Buneary!
Buneary
Level 14
Female
Would you like to name it?

"Yes! I caught my first pokemon!"

Surskit jumps around, cheering around Ledi's eggs and his new pokemon

(I'd like to name Buneary Hoppit)

(Okay, all done! Would you like to have an NPC accompany you on your journey?)

(A second person that's a NPC would be great! I had planned on making one but I forgot about it)

(Alright, then!)
As Ledi cheered with joy, some footsteps came rushing towards Ledian.
"It's a Ledian! I don't have a Ledian yet!" A young female voice shouted. A tall girl with blonde hair, blue eyes, and red sunglasses appeared. She looked rather excited, and immediately sent out a Pokemon to battle the 'wild' Ledian.
"Let's go, Breeze!"
A small shiny Eevee popped out from the PokeBall with a determined expression on its face.

(I'm kinda confused if the NPC's Eevee is a shiny or not because it says "A small shiny Eevee popped out of the pokeball, but it doesn't matter)

"Um, who are you? And I'm not a Ledian, I'm just a human who was transformed into one. And to show proof, I'd gladly battle you, and you can pick my pokemon to use."

At the moment Ledi finished talking, Hoppit, Swadloon, Joltik, and Surskit pop out of their balls, ready to battle.

(It's a shiny XD Sorry I didn't clarify it well)
The shiny Eevee stopped dead on when Ledi explained that he was a human rather than a Ledian. It looked very confused.
"Vee?" it murmured with a look of confusion, then turned to the girl for any further instructions.
"Wait, so you're telling me you're not a Ledian? Just a human turned into one? That's a bit confusing... But, I guess I'll take on your offer for a battle! I won't battle you, but how about a battle between my Eevee and your Swadloon?"

"It's a deal! And never before have I encountered a Shiny Eevee! Swadloon, are you ready?"

"Loonloonswadloon!", the pokemon said, ready for battle

Swadloon ran out to the battlefield, keeping a cautious eye for any tricks.

"I'll let Breeze use the first move.", Ledi, said, ready to battle.

"I guess I get the upper hand, then!" the mystery trainer said with a cheeky grin. She pointed at Swadloon with her index finger, then shouted a command.
"Breeze! Use Sand-Attack and make yourself 'invisible'!"
The shiny Eevee nodded, kicking up sand and dust causing clouds to appear, making seeing anything almost impossible.

"I've seen this on a show before. Swadloon, use Razor Leaf!"
Leaves were tossed everywhere, creating tons of sand flying everywhere. Unfortunately, Swadloon got sand in her eyes, and couldn't see anything, and none of the knife sharp leaves came close to Breeze.

Swadloon's Accuracy fell!