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PostSubject: Rei Saar   Rei Saar H6Q0F8zWed Mar 12, 2014 4:54 am

Name:
Rei Saar
Nickname:
Ri,Rin,or Rita
Age:
15
Gender:
Female
Rank:
Trainer
Birthplace:
Unova, Castelia City
Battle Style:
Warm up with weaker moves and finish strong.
Looks:
Rei's hair is a rich dark brown, She brushes it out in the morning and lets it fall where it wants to. part of her bangs sweep in front of her left eye concealing parts of it from view. Her eyes are a mystic violet and her skin is rather pale giving her a touch of the strange creepy girl look.
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Personality:
Rei is often mistaken as a quiet secluded girl for she is usually by herself, straying away from massive crowds and gatherings.Then again, there is more to a book than the cover. She is quite a devoted and loyal girl who will do whatever she can to help a friend or get a task done. Rei has a tough time backing away from a challenge. At times she can have a bad temper and even be stubborn to the core. Truly Rei is a bit of a paranoid girl, She tends to think of the absolute worst thing that could happen thanks to a bad habit of thinking ahead. She is afraid of being alone, small spaces, and water? Giving birth to this phobia: Rei had a bit of a bad childhood experience. She nearly drowned after being knocked off the pier by a rampaging gyarados. This caused made her afraid of getting to close to the water,fearing she will get herself in the same predicament again.
History:
Rei was born and Raised in Unova. Rei's Father left her mother when he found out that they were going to have a child. Rei knew little about her father. She never even met him, for her mother only told her about him to a certain extent:"Not all people are good, Rei." Her mother was a pokemon professor at one point, Professor Saar. She spent her days learning all that she could about ghost and dark type pokemon even allowing Rei to help out during a few occasions. As Rei grew older she began to feel like her mothers protege, Assisting her and going to all sorts of places to help in her mother's research. That all went downhill one day. Professor Saar suddenly began to suffer from insomnia causing her a severe loss of energy. Day by day she grew more and more weak and her heart beat slowed little by little. She knew that she wouldn't last much longer. So Rei's mother began to give up any hope of getting well. She insisted that Rei would continue her research in her place as she forfeited her journals and even her beloved pokemon,Spirit, to her daughter. Later that very night Rei lost her mother to the sudden illness. Professor Saar never got to learn as much as she wanted about dark and ghost pokemon. Rei decided it was best to fulfill her mother's ambition for her from that point onward she would do everything she could to learn everything about ghost and dark pokemon.
Badges:
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Items:
5 Poke Balls
Money:
$6,200
Pokémon
Pokémon:
Shuppet
Spoiler:
Nickname:
Spirit
Gender:
Male
Level:
7
Moves:
(TM17) Protect
(Egg) Phantom Force
Knock Off
Screech
Night Shade
Personality:
Rash/Clumsy
Exp:
0


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PostSubject: Re: Rei Saar   Rei Saar H6Q0F8zWed Mar 12, 2014 5:00 am

Please fix some of the typos, and Shuppet should have more moves than that. Go into more depth on her history. What was the bad experience that caused the water phobia, why did her father leave her, how was life growing up, how did she obtain Shuppet? If you can go into more depth on her personality, too, I'd like that as well.
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PostSubject: Re: Rei Saar   Rei Saar H6Q0F8zWed Mar 12, 2014 5:38 pm

Nishwishes wrote:
Please fix some of the typos, and Shuppet should have more moves than that. Go into more depth on her history. What was the bad experience that caused the water phobia, why did her father leave her, how was life growing up, how did she obtain Shuppet? If you can go into more depth on her personality, too, I'd like that as well.

These are fine suggestions for moderating a character application. I have nothing further to say other than I will hopefully have a post for your topic sometime this week, but I have about a week and a half of school left and I have a few things to finish.

Kronos wrote:
He has the choice  to know only that move, he does have a paragraph history, which is the only thing required, and the rules state, that your only obliged to say where you get your pokemon if the level is higher then 12.

No, actually. Pokemon learn moves up to the level they are at. Shuppet should know, in addition to knowing Protect, Knock Off, Screech, and Night Shade. Shuppet is also permitted to learn a single EGG Move in addition to the TM. As for the paragraph history Kronos, I know we aren't a site that asks for much, however there is room for improvement like Nishwishes suggested. Obviously details like what was suggested are important and other characters wouldn't know it, but certainly this character would know the exact reason why they're afraid of water, unless they suffered from some sort of long-term amnesia. I also looked around the site for the rules and I couldn't for the life of me, find the relevant rule that states that. Perhaps next time you wish to comment on something, you should link the topic in question to back up your point.

Also, Rei-Chan, Ghost/Dark Analyst isn't exactly a rank here at the moment. Perhaps you could simply go with the Pokemon Trainer, and in the personality state that your character is more attuned to something of a Pokemon Analyst/Researcher. We can't have people using classes that aren't listed, because then we have to give them pros and cons but because we are looking to rework the classes of trainer available, we shall consider the pros and cons a Pokemon Researcher/Analyst could have.
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PostSubject: Re: Rei Saar   Rei Saar H6Q0F8zWed Mar 12, 2014 9:59 pm

Thanks a bunch for the input I'll get this patched up ASAP. c:
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PostSubject: Re: Rei Saar   Rei Saar H6Q0F8zThu Mar 13, 2014 4:23 am

Okay, I've gone ahead and fixed it up!
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PostSubject: Re: Rei Saar   Rei Saar H6Q0F8zThu Mar 13, 2014 4:29 am

Aside from the typo of *Unova, this is a beautiful app. :P Definitely approved. Go ahead and start your journey, my friend!
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PostSubject: Re: Rei Saar   Rei Saar H6Q0F8zThu Mar 13, 2014 4:38 am

Ha! I fixed that typo! Its officially Perfect!~ Thanks for the help guys!
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