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PostSubject: Carl W. Smith, Jr. (Edit= complete)   Carl W. Smith, Jr. (Edit= complete) H6Q0F8zThu Mar 26, 2015 3:47 am

|~ Gen. Information ~|
Aliases / Names:
*Carl W. Smith, Jr.

Age | Birthplace | Gender:
*Sixteen years old
*Male
*Jubilife City (Sinnoh)

Trainer Rank:
*Pokemon Trainer

|~ Characterization ~|
Appearance:
*Carl has a bit of a slouch, and his eyelids always droop. This is because he is constantly staying awake late at night, studying dentistry. He looks and acts much older than he really is, and with his short and messy blonde hair and dark blue eyes Carl is practically a split image of his father. He is slightly taller than most kids are at his age. This, paired with the fact that he is slightly underweight, gives him a lanky appearance. He has somewhat pale skin, that gives him a bit of a sickly appearance. He tends to dress unusually professionally for someone his age, favoring button up shirts over jeans.
*Note*
I know that you guys would like me to go more in detail with Carl's appearance, which I have done, a little bit, however I am aware I have not gone to the degree of detail that many other people have done. I just feel Carl's physical appearance isn't very important, because it doesn't seem like something important to Carl... I know this probably sounds a little weird and I hope you understand. If not, that's OK, I'll try and get a little more detail.
We now return to our regularly scheduled Carl W. Smith, Jr.  
Personality:
*Unlike many other people that own Pokemon, Carl doesn't really care about his performance in battles; he doesn't want to catch all of the Pokemon or collect all of the gym badges. Carl simply wants to follow in his father's footsteps and become a dentist (specifically a human dentist). Carl has studied and researched dentistry since he was merely six years old. Because of this, Carl has a higher understanding of human anatomy than even Oak. However, his understanding of Pokemon is sub par. It is worth noting that, while Carl would never promote poor treatment of Pokemon, he wouldn't prevent someone from treating their Pokemon poorly.  
Carl Summary/ Misc. Notes-
-Bad at making decisions
-Carl believes that Pokemon= tools
-Incredibly high value for human well being
-Stoic, rational thinker- most logical decision (Brutus, for you Caesar fans)
-Saddened by people that are "obsessed" with Pokemon (gets along poorly w/ gym leaders)

Battle Style:
*Carl doesn't have much battle experience. He generally is very risky, and will make sacrifices in battle. He certainly doesn't go out of his way to get as few faints as possible.
Past Experience / History:
*Because there are so few individuals working in the field of dentistry,  when a women's mamoswine got into a terrible accident in Snowpoint City. Carl Senior, although a specialist in human dentistry, was able to figure out and solve the problem, which actually saved the mamoswine's life. Because of this, one of the women working at the gym, Savannah, fell madly in love with Carl. Soon, they became married and moved to Jubilife city, where they gave birth to two children, five years apart. Justin, the younger child, and Carl Junior, the oldest. Unfortunately, when Junior was seven years old, Savannah and Senior went through a nasty divorce. Carl Senior didn't express the same level of compassion that Savannah did; although he didn't hate Pokemon, he saw them as mere tools. Savannah moved back into Snowpoint City and took Justin with her, and leaving Carl Junior with his father. As a result of this, Justin spent more time with his mother, and shared her love of Pokemon, however, Carl Junior spent far more time with his father, learning the tricks and trade of dentistry as Carl Senior became his role model. Despite this, Justin always treated Carl very well, however, Carl was always tired by his younger brother's energy.
Eventually, Carl Jr. was ready to start working as a dentist, but his mother wouldn't allow it. She claimed Carl needed to collect all of the gym badges and defeat the elite four, or at least give some sort of effort to do so. This is because Savannah couldn't stand to see her son grow up without the same love of Pokemon that she had. Of course, Carl protested, but she wouldn't hear any of it. Savannah sent Carl and Justin to retrieve their Pokemon from the lab in Sandgem Town. At the time, Professor Rowan was fairly short on Pokemon. After Justin selected his starter, Carl Jr. decided to select the Pokemon that would make the best dental assistant as his starter, however there were only a few that would fit in a dental office, and only one of those had arms. Carl Jr. finally determined that it would be most logical to select Claps the Spinda as his starter Pokemon.

|~ Inventory ~|
(Note: Carl has no badges, at least not yet)

Money: $6,200
Items:
05x Pokeballs


|~ Pokemon ~|
Species: Spinda
Nickname: Claps
Gender: Male
Level: 11
Experience: 6
Ability: Own Tempo
Personality:
Loves music and dancing, just wants Carl Jr. to lighten up, named after his tendency to clap to the rythm or beat of music that is playing.
Impish
Moves:
Fake Out (egg move)
Tackle
Feint Attack
Copy Cat
(Erm... changed my mind about toxic... I'll probably decide on a TM down the road. For now, no TM)


Last edited by SlurpeeSquid on Sat Mar 28, 2015 4:47 am; edited 5 times in total
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PostSubject: Re: Carl W. Smith, Jr. (Edit= complete)   Carl W. Smith, Jr. (Edit= complete) H6Q0F8zFri Mar 27, 2015 1:31 pm

Are you sure you mean Spinda and not Spinarak? If it is Spinda then the moves should be:
Tackle - Start
Copycat - Level 5
Feint Attack - Level 10

Also if Toxic is your TM Move of choice then please put TM next to it so, that people know as it isn't in the usual moves list (by levels)

Looks could be a bit longer as it's not very descriptive saying he's a `a split image of his father` isn't exactly much in the way of explaining his looks as we don't know what his father looks like, also Blonde hair, Blue Eyes is kinda generic; Not saying you can't use it in any way just mean that a lot of people have blonde hair, blue eyes, so just saying that doesn't help you have to be way more descriptive for approval. Also saying
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The only thing extrodinary about Carl's appearance is that it is not incredibly average.
just asks more questions than in answers, for example, in what way, what would you see as average, we know he's a slouch and his head leads or something but, you need to just expand on/improve on/fix your: Looks Section and Pokemon
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PostSubject: Re: Carl W. Smith, Jr. (Edit= complete)   Carl W. Smith, Jr. (Edit= complete) H6Q0F8zFri Mar 27, 2015 8:03 pm

As an addition, if you look at other apps, your history is easily too short and not too long. There's no mention of how the divorce affected the siblings, what made dentistry so important to him, why his mother sent him off on a journey, why Spinda was the only option, etc. There are a lot of holes here.
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PostSubject: Re: Carl W. Smith, Jr. (Edit= complete)   Carl W. Smith, Jr. (Edit= complete) H6Q0F8zSat Mar 28, 2015 1:21 am

Thanks for the feedback guys! I'll edit it and let you know when I finish fixing the mistakes.
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PostSubject: Re: Carl W. Smith, Jr. (Edit= complete)   Carl W. Smith, Jr. (Edit= complete) H6Q0F8zSat Mar 28, 2015 4:54 am

Well, it has been edited, lemme know what u guys think Excided
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PostSubject: Re: Carl W. Smith, Jr. (Edit= complete)   Carl W. Smith, Jr. (Edit= complete) H6Q0F8zSat Mar 28, 2015 2:21 pm

Well it meets the minimum required so after your edits it is now 100% approved unless another member of staff says otherwise
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